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Alexander Ipfelkofer's avatar

Always good to write with the senses. I'm sure you don't need luck but I cheer you on, Dan! Go, go, sight, taste, touch, smell and sound out the other four!

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much Alexander 🙏

I’ll give it my best shot 😁

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A.C. Cargill, All-Human Author's avatar

Ah, yes, the smell in a loved ones hair. Something I know well.

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K.C. Knouse's avatar

This reads like the last scene of an epic novel. Perfect last line.

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much K.C. 🙏

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Justin Deming's avatar

Oh wow, Daniel, loved this story! And your idea for writing additional stories sounds like such fun! I wish you luck with the remaining stories. Thank you as always for mentioning me.

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much Justin 🙏

Yeah, one story just didn’t seem enough for such a great prompt 🙂👍🏼

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Ika Wright's avatar

You have a knack for tugging my heart string and with few choice images too. Great job Daniel!

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much Ika 🙏

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Nathan Slake's avatar

What a lovely image to go with the charming, moving story. As always, I'm so impressed how you pack so much into so few words.

Go go go with the others!

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much, Nathan 🙏

Pretty much got another 2 of them written today so I’m getting there! 😁

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Nathan Slake's avatar

Nicely done!

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Caro Henry's avatar

A very moving piece in only 50 words. I love this, Dan!

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much, Caro 🙏

I’m so glad you liked it as it’s one of the very few stories that I got emotional about whilst writing, and I’m not entirely sure why 🤔

However, I’m glad I was able to pass that on through the story. As always your kind words are much appreciated 🙂

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David B. Corder's avatar

Really like this. Short and sweet. A story after Hemingway's own heart.

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much David 🙏

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Michael B. Morgan's avatar

Daniel, you really moved me. Of course you can't know why, you don't know me, but you have given me an answer that I have been in search of myself. Thank you.

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thank you very much, Michael for such a lovely message 👍🏼

I’m so glad you had that emotional connection to the story. I can ask for nothing more 🙏

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Jason Duck's avatar

Wow 👏 👏👏🙌

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much Jason 🙏

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Hanna Delaney's avatar

Very moving. I love a good microfiction.

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much Hanna 🙏

I’m so glad you liked it 🙂

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much, Nadia. I’m so glad you liked the story 🙏

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May 24, 2024
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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

That show has been recommended to me by so many people and I’ve never got around to watching it. I’ll need to make an extra effort now 👍🏼🙂

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Daniel O’Donnell's avatar

Thanks very much Bethel 🙏

I really appreciate your kind feedback. I’ve seen some quite dismissive takes on micro fiction, saying it’s not proper story telling, which I obviously completely disagree with. It’s tough trying to tell a story which such limitations, but that’s also what I think makes them so worthwhile, because you have to work hard to create a world in 50 words. You should definitely give it a go! 👍🏼

I’ve got another 3 coming this week, starting with tonight, so hope you enjoy them too 🙂

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