The way this is paced and formatted adds an interesting... let's call it texture, to the story. It feels more like a succinct prose poem than it does the typical snipped sized story-in-brief we usually get with 100 word flash fiction. This is to the piece's benefit, I'd say. I often find 100 word fantasy stories feel a little too bare to be satisfying, but whether intentionally or not, the fact it reads like a prose poem helps alleviate that common issue. That is to say, it feels like you were very careful about your word choice and imagery, which makes this short piece feel distinctly more impactful than most 100 word fantasy stories I've read. Well done.
Thanks very much. I really appreciate the kind feedback 🙏
You’re right. There were many changes right up until I hit publish just trying to get it to sit right. I’m probably still not 100% happy with the last few lines, if I’m being honest, but they conveyed enough of what I was trying to say, so that was good enough 👍🏼
I was just thinking, "This reminds me of Game of Thrones," when you mentioned it yourself. I was actually thinking of Stannis's death, when Brienne comes up to him against the tree. Great visuals, great piece, great S&S addition.
I do find the shorter the story the easier it is for me. I’m doing one on Robert the Bruce just now which is a wee bit longer but not over 1000 words. I think by round about that amount of words, I start to get bored of myself never mind the reader getting bored of me😁
Flash Fiction is a great way to experiment, too! I would set the limit at 1500 words. Sometimes it’s a good challenge to try to write to an exact word count, too. Keep it fun ;)
😂 " why doesn’t someone just keep shooting him with arrows, like they did with his brother, and then they can all go home for tea? " the million dollar question! What if there was a war and nobody went...
The way this is paced and formatted adds an interesting... let's call it texture, to the story. It feels more like a succinct prose poem than it does the typical snipped sized story-in-brief we usually get with 100 word flash fiction. This is to the piece's benefit, I'd say. I often find 100 word fantasy stories feel a little too bare to be satisfying, but whether intentionally or not, the fact it reads like a prose poem helps alleviate that common issue. That is to say, it feels like you were very careful about your word choice and imagery, which makes this short piece feel distinctly more impactful than most 100 word fantasy stories I've read. Well done.
Thanks very much. I really appreciate the kind feedback 🙏
You’re right. There were many changes right up until I hit publish just trying to get it to sit right. I’m probably still not 100% happy with the last few lines, if I’m being honest, but they conveyed enough of what I was trying to say, so that was good enough 👍🏼
I was just thinking, "This reminds me of Game of Thrones," when you mentioned it yourself. I was actually thinking of Stannis's death, when Brienne comes up to him against the tree. Great visuals, great piece, great S&S addition.
Thanks Sam.
Of course. That’s a great scene as well 👍🏼
Battle of the Bastards, what an epic episode (never mind bows and arrows ;) A great vignette, I must try one of these sometime.
Thanks Alexander 🙏
I do find the shorter the story the easier it is for me. I’m doing one on Robert the Bruce just now which is a wee bit longer but not over 1000 words. I think by round about that amount of words, I start to get bored of myself never mind the reader getting bored of me😁
Flash Fiction is a great way to experiment, too! I would set the limit at 1500 words. Sometimes it’s a good challenge to try to write to an exact word count, too. Keep it fun ;)
😂 " why doesn’t someone just keep shooting him with arrows, like they did with his brother, and then they can all go home for tea? " the million dollar question! What if there was a war and nobody went...
Heh, very much enjoyed Dan!
"The accusing dead.". What a great line!
Thanks very much, Nathan 🙏
Yeah, I liked that one too 😁
That first line is great. Made me a shudder a little.
Thanks very much Patricia 🙏